Sunday, October 21, 2007

The Beginnings of a Writing Exercise

Here are two descriptions of a tree and a sunset:

1) The tree bent, bathed by the warming beams of the setting sun.

2) The tree twisted against the night as if drowning in darkness, gasping for the last light of the sinking sun.

I don't know about you, but I'd much rather be the first tree. The second tree sounds like a total pansy.

2 comments:

dawnarchitect said...

3) The tree bowed, immersed by the amiable rays of a peeing sun (named Fergie).

lolli said...

You'd much rather be the first tree : bent.